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Author Topic: Can I get a quick red-line please?  (Read 1256 times)

Offline Blot

Can I get a quick red-line please?
«: March 09, 2010, 05:02:15 PM»
I'm been trying to get this pose down all day, and I haven't been able to find a decent picture with this pose. so of course I tried doing it in front of out closet mirror. Well, it kinda worked, but there's something wrong, and I can't pinpoint it. Can any one do a reline for me please?

http://i298.photobucket.com/albums/mm261/FreakBeasts/redlineplox.png

Pleas excuse the blottyness, the lines were super light, and didn't scan super well so I had to mess with the sketch.

Thank you very much in advance :)
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Offline Tain

Re: Can I get a quick red-line please?
«Reply #1: March 09, 2010, 06:50:36 PM»
i'm no good at redlining, but, the neck looks a little thin to me.
andd the left arm (one on the ground) looks a little bit shorter than the other. I also think the thighs are a little big and the right one (also on the ground) is placed too high up and a little thick for the perspective.
i'm not sure though, but from how thin you have the stomach area is looks like shes on her belly instead of her side.

Offline Blot

Re: Can I get a quick red-line please?
«Reply #2: March 09, 2010, 09:25:31 PM»
Ah yea, I noticed the neck and fixed it already, and I'm trying to figure out the best tight placement. Her belly/side might look a bit thin because the character I'm drawing has worn a corset pretty much all of her life and has had everything trained into being small. though I am thinking it might be a bit to small, even for corset training.

Thank you though O= I'm going to fix the arm, and work on the thighs a bit more, to see if that helps.
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Offline Rex T-Rex

Re: Can I get a quick red-line please?
«Reply #3: March 09, 2010, 09:48:26 PM»
I think the problem is that you're not being sharp enough with your curves for corset training. It depends on just what kind of corset you're going for. Modern day corsets don't actually do that much and wouldn't have anywhere near that much of a curve. Old fashion corsets make small waists and big tops and bottoms. The body also become sharp, not very curved but more of a sharp line down with a bell bottom out.
Like this -> NSFW http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/e/e0/Dieselbe_mit_einem_fehlerhaftenCorset.jpg

Notice the lack of curve and more of a straight edge.
http://fashionindie.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/10/dita_von_teese_021.jpg

Also, even for corset training, keep in mind that the hips and shoulders are still going to be proportionate. The hips you have drawn are much larger than her shoulders, unless she was born with irregular shoulders and hips, this would not occur. At the very least they would be closer to being the same size, perhaps the hips might look a tad larger, but not by that much.
http://www.uihealthcare.com/depts/medmuseum/wallexhibits/images/CorsetComp.jpg
http://www.greenriver.edu/news/images/woman_corset.jpg Even with this extreme corset training you can see that the shoulder width and hip width match up.
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Offline Blot

Re: Can I get a quick red-line please?
«Reply #4: March 09, 2010, 10:00:58 PM»
Ahhh there we go :D Most of the pictures I saw were more modern corsets. I shall have to fix that one.
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