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Fry

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crits?
«: October 23, 2008, 10:26:19 PM»


plz. i just started doing ~ serious ~ anthro art and UH this is my first port. i know theres no shading buttt eventually there will be... i just wanna know if everything looks okay?
« Last Edit: October 24, 2008, 07:47:52 PM by Constantine »

 
        

Offline Adielle

Re: crits?
«Reply #1: October 23, 2008, 10:39:03 PM»
I don't really draw full anthros myself, but from what I see, this looks absolutely wonderful.  The lineart is really clean and crisp.  Your definitely on the right track.  Add some nice shading and this will be an amazing first port.  <3
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Offline lu

Re: crits?
«Reply #2: October 24, 2008, 04:06:09 AM»
this is really good. i wish i could draw muzzles on anthros like that LOL

Offline Lovedoll

Re: crits?
«Reply #3: October 24, 2008, 09:21:52 AM»
You may want to widen the shoulders a little, but otherwise it looks okay. :D

Offline Safiye

Re: crits?
«Reply #4: October 24, 2008, 09:35:13 AM»
The individual pieces look great, but the body is way too small for the head.

Starri is right that the shoulders are too narrow, even for a slightly twisted pose. As a rule of thumb, if you measure someone's neck, their shoulders will be three times that width. In other words, the average shoulders could fit three necks on them, with very few exceptions.

Offline Mala

Re: crits?
«Reply #5: October 24, 2008, 09:35:24 AM»
the body looks a tiny bit small compared to the head

but its really good overall!  :D

Fry

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Re: crits?
«Reply #6: October 24, 2008, 07:48:23 PM»
thank you guys very much for the crits 8) <3

i updated it. is this better y/n?

Offline Mala

Re: crits?
«Reply #7: October 24, 2008, 07:58:56 PM»
it is slightly better yes. c:

take in mind what safiye said! the shoulders are still too skinny compared to the neck. i'd make the neck a little smaller, and the shoulders bigger, but you can do whatever.

and i think you have one too many lines on the neck?
« Last Edit: October 25, 2008, 09:48:15 AM by Mina-chan »

Fry

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Re: crits?
«Reply #8: October 24, 2008, 08:03:49 PM»
and i think you have one too many lines on the neck?
ayeah. they're guides for me later when im shading so i dont forget. c:

Offline Poi

Re: crits?
«Reply #9: October 24, 2008, 08:38:09 PM»
So here's my crit.

Shoulders- The width between a males shoulders should average bout 2 1/2 to 3 head sizes. Do you feel this is to par? I think then need to be wider.
Also. Male shoulders are more 'boxy' and square as apposed to female. I feel like because they're smaller, and round all about due to it, you're not getting that manly feel.

Neck : Your lines a good, but the jugular isn't that thick. Try making it a bit slimmer, but I see where you're going.

Otherwise I think it's really good :)

Offline Lovedoll

Re: crits?
«Reply #10: October 25, 2008, 06:21:14 AM»
Neck : Your lines a good, but the jugular isn't that thick. Try making it a bit slimmer, but I see where you're going.

and i think you have one too many lines on the neck?
ayeah. they're guides for me later when im shading so i dont forget. c:

 

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